Campbell’s poem


I would like to say it was a very well written poem. I like how the poet incorporated "I feel something different” because it is very smart and witty to repeat a line across to the readers. Other words such as “Light powder on the beach” are very imaginative that I believe you should include in your poem more. When I hear the word “light powder” it is a sense of imagery which is very forceful. Those two words allows the reader to dive into the poem like diving into a snow bank. Though, the rest of the poem is not entirely descriptive. I don’t understand what the poet is trying to say when they say I feel something different. “But on these cold days the lake shore feels different” You’re not explaining thoroughly your thoughts and ideas. The foundation of the poem is there, but from what I’ve read there doesn’t seem to be a deeper meaning. That is the whole point of a poem the deeper meaning. The end is not entirely strong with grammar mistakes, but the poet will be able to fix that. You should come up with a rhyme that will really catch the reader’s attention to finish off your poem. Whenever someone reads a poem they always remember the end. How it left them feeling at the end. If you have a strong finish at the end of your poem it will greatly increase the satisfaction of the reader. It can make or break a poem. These are just some of my ideas and thoughts and I hope you put them to good use.

As the wind brushed my cold cheeks
And as the snow crunches by each step I take
I feel something different
The Canadian winter is incredible

I have walked there in the summer
But on these cold days the lake shore feels different
Although the winter looks calm the creatures of the forest are still near by
The rabbit’s foot steps are lying in the light powder on the beach.
I feel something different
The forest still feels warm to me

As I walk along the beach I breathe in the fresh air
I feel the cold as the snowflakes fall upon my hair
I can only imagine the warmth of the hot chocolate I will drink later
But for now ill bask in natures great changes
I feel something different
I winter is such a different place
I could stay there forever